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« Reply #120 on: January 29, 2010, 06:01:49 pm »

1. @ Tiền bối thiduong: "Giả nai chăn thợ săn" ạ. Nghĩa là "cáo đang mượn oai hùm" ạ! Kính xin các đại tiền bối và... hờ hờ... các ác-min đánh cho mấy chữ đại xá. Cháu sẽ giải thích sau ạ!
2. @ all: cháu ghé cổng nhà anh Gúc mấy phút, mượn anh ấy cái topic về nấu nướng, kết quả được thế này. Kính xin các đại tiền bối comment giúp ạ:
- Mấy cái chỗ many color ý, thì chọn cái nào hay hơn ạ? Có cái nào thay thế tốt hơn nữa không ạ?
- Có đại tiền bối nào là teacher, chấm bài cho cháu xem được nhiêu điểm ạ (thang điểm 9 của IELTS đi.
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What is a fire extinguisher? Write a description of how a fire extinguisher works. (At least 150 words).
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As far as I know, a fire extinguisher is a hermetic container which is usually made by the special steel, so as to be safe and durable. Normally, the container is painted in red to be recognized/to help people to recognize easily.
Under the ordinary condition, the container contains water, a siphon tube and a cartridge of gas. Although the cartridge of gas is much smaller than the container but they look like the same. The cartridge of gas also has a valve on the top which controls releasing gas. The siphon tube and the cartridge of gas are fixed vertically along the container and called the internal system.
The external system is made from three pieces of equiment including a pull pin, a lever and a nozzle. Both systems are linked together perfectly and then kept securely at the mouth of the container.
When people open the pin and then push down the lever, the rod opens valve releasing gas into the main container. Following this, water is forced up the siphon tube to release gas immediately throughout the nozzle. Conversely, if you do not want to continue using, you should release the lever in order to stop gas.

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« Reply #121 on: February 04, 2010, 02:05:28 am »

Chờ mãi chẳng thấy các cụ có ý kiến, ý cò j -> Warm up phát (cũng phải transit qua nhà anh Gúc, rồi mới xào nấu.
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Academic achievement at school or university is the only true measure of a person’s intelligence.
To what extent do you agree with this statement? (At least 250 words).
There are different opinions to evaluate a person’s ability. Some people believe that getting good achievements or advanced qualifications at school or university is the only best way to prove how intelligent you are. Other people do not agree with this statement. Who is right?
People in favour of academic achievements at school or university are unique evidences affirm that the owner is extremely smart because of the following reasons. When people study at school or university, they have equal conditions to study such as learning time, documents, supporting from teachers…etc... But a huge number of students have no good achievements. In contrast, a few people who always achieve A marks and being among the top 5 advanced students at their universities because of their intelligence. More importantly, when people get good results at school, they have big chances to enroll a famous university to get higher qualifications such as BA, Master or PhD degrees. Further, they can gain valuable awards such as Nobel Prize. Clearly, these achievements indicate the person’s intelligence.
On the other hand, some people argue that getting academic achievements do not measure intelligence. In fact, there are lots of people who do not enroll a university and even they leave school when they are teenaged. Thus, they have no academic achievements at school or university. But they still create useful inventions because of their intelligence. In this case, Bill Gate is an example. He was not very good at school. He left the university when he was the second year student. Then he established the software company which called Microsoft and wrote a lot of smart software for computer such as Windows XP, Windows Vista... People acknowledge that Bill is a person of great intelligence.
In my opinion, we should not only evaluate people by seeing their achievements or certifications that they got at school or university. Instead, we should evaluate them throughout their ability and things that they bring to society.

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« Reply #122 on: February 20, 2010, 03:52:38 pm »

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« Reply #123 on: June 05, 2010, 01:38:15 pm »

I'm intending to seat in an IELTS exam. Hope for comments on my Essay.
Thank you ^^
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Some people think we should demolish old buildings to give way to mordern ones while others claim it is a rash decision
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With a rapid development in every aspects of economic and social life, it certainly leads to the need for new infrastructure and super-structure. In order to accomplish actions torward these purposes, many people suggest ideas of constructing new modern buildings parallel to demolishing old ones. However, many others are in an opposite stand to say that idea is nothing short of a rash action. Each of these advocates have their own merits.
First of all, it is indeed reasonable with a suggestion of demolishing old buildings to pave the way for modern ones. From the point of art view, a new city needed to be equipped with beautiful clothes to deserve its development. It is an indispensable criterion to evaluate the quality of a city, modern infrastructure including new buildings, roads, stores etc before taking a deep view on other sides. Secondly, owing a modern foundation would absolutely enhance and facilitate the efficiency of economic and political systems and attract more and more partners to co-operate with the local government and the face of the city would change as a clear consequence. One typical city in Vietnam could be cited when putting it into example is the capital – Hanoi. With the born of Hanoi Tower, the number of office accommodated inside increases with modern facilities i.e it can save places when concentrating the offices, moreover, many partners would like to choose this as a head-quarter, this can earn deep respect of customer at least the first look. (note: no one know the fact ^^)
However, other people of concern may oppose this idea when regarding it as a rash decision; this is plausible owing to the fact that, removing old buildings firstly would result in a waste of money needed for these ones in the past. Evidently, a vast budget could be invested  and now they are being thrown out of window, so advocates of remaining old buildings may wonder if this is an appropriate decision or not. What happen if now we demolish the Eiffel tower in Paris and build a more modern one instead? Secondly, standing in the cultural and historical view-point, each old building would retain a sense of tradition, probably, if it is removed, this has the same meaning that we are destroying a heritage, whole the world know the historical value of Eiffel tower, without a doubt.
Deciding whether or not we should replace old building by new one is really a big question and need to be taken into account with a deep care, a couple of aspects should be considered: economy, politic, culture, etc. And more importantly, this tough decision also strongly depends on the particular conditions of areas where it is taking place. The local government and its citizens should seat together to arrive at a pertinent choice..
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« Reply #124 on: June 05, 2010, 02:04:49 pm »

With a rapid development in every aspects of economic and social life, it certainly leads to the need for new infrastructure and super-structure(there will be demand for...). In order to accomplish actions torward these purposes, many people suggest ideas of constructing new modern buildings parallel to demolishing old ones. However, many others are in an opposite stand to say that idea is nothing short of a rash action. Each of these advocates have their own merits.
First of all, it is indeed reasonable with a suggestion of demolishing old buildings to pave the way for modern ones. From the point of art view, a new city needed to be equipped with beautiful clothes to deserve its development. It is an indispensable(important) criterion to evaluate the quality(appearance) of a city, modern infrastructure including new buildings, roads, stores etc before taking a deep view on other sides. Secondly, owing a modern foundation would absolutely enhance and facilitate the efficiency of economic  and political systems and (as well as) attract more and more partners to co-operate with the local government and the face of the city would change as a clear consequence. One typical city in Vietnam could be cited when putting it into example is the capital – Hanoi. With the born of Hanoi Tower, the number of office accommodated inside increases with modern facilities i.e it can save places when concentrating the offices, moreover, many partners would like to choose this as a head-quarter, this can earn deep respect of customer at least the first look. (note: no one know the fact ^^)
However, other people of concern may oppose this idea when regarding it as a rash decision; this is plausible owing to the fact that, removing old buildings firstly would result in (mean) a waste of money needed for these ones in the past. Evidently, a vast budget could be invested  and now they are being thrown out of window, so advocates of remaining old buildings may wonder if this is an appropriate decision or not. What (would) happen if now we demolish the Eiffel tower in Paris and build a more modern one instead? Secondly, standing in the cultural and historical view-point (in the point of...), each old building would retain a sense of tradition, probably, if it is removed, this has the same meaning that we are destroying a heritage, whole the world know the historical value of Eiffel tower, without a doubt.
Deciding whether or not we should replace old building by new one is really a big question and need to be taken into account with a deep care, a couple of aspects should be considered: economy, politic, culture, etc. And more importantly, this tough decision also strongly depends on the particular conditions of areas where it is taking place. The local government and its citizens should seat together to arrive at a pertinent choice..

Sau khi đọc mình thấy nhìn chung có một số lỗi về ngữ pháp như phân biệt giữa động từ và tính từ...
Một số chỗ mình nghĩ bạn dùng từ không hợp lý
IELTS writing yêu cầu tính học thuật và nghiêm túc nên bạn nên hạn chế dùng Phrasal verb cũng như cách diễn đạt nên ngắn gọn và súc tích, tránh dịch word by word nhé
Thêm nữa, theo những gì mình được biết thì thi IELTS bạn nên viết 5 paragraph essay và cần có sự cân đối giữa các đoạn ấy

Đoạn cuối bạn viết khá tốt.

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« Reply #125 on: June 06, 2010, 10:36:55 am »

Thank  u so much, I took notes on all of ur cmts
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« Reply #126 on: June 16, 2010, 09:16:17 pm »

can you guys chek this 4 me?


Task:
It’s important that children should study hard at school. Time spent playing sports is waste. Do you agree with this idea?

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Some people think the purpose children go to school is to obtain knowledge, so it’s such a waste of time when they spend time playing sports. I think this idea is wrong completely for 3 following reasons: playing sports is not only good for a child’s health but also teaches him how to work in a team well and helps him reduce stress.

To a child, studying is the first priority. However, what will happen if that child just study and study without any physical activity?

Firstly, it can make his health worse. A report of a group scientist showed that in UK there are more than 65% children being overweight for sitting in a place too long such as watching television, reading books or using Internet. Playing sports can improve health, reduce the number of obese children.

Moreover, playing sports, as football or base ball, can help a child know about the importance of building a good teamwork. He will learn that working with his team can help them achieve their goals more easily than individual working.

In addition, playing sports can help the child reduce stress.  Nowadays, children become stressful more easily because of studying too much, so children should enjoy outside-activities. Playing sports can bring laughs to them and help them feel no pressure of school and exams.

Indeed, from three reasons discussed above, I strongly believe that playing sports is very necessary for children. They are just some of benefits sports bring to children. Although how long a child should spend on sports depends on his physical, I think they'd better play at least 30’/day.
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« Reply #127 on: June 17, 2010, 03:43:33 pm »

 =D> good arrangement and ideas. Logical and coherent.
A litle improvement on E usage would give u a really good score.
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« Reply #128 on: June 20, 2010, 02:35:28 pm »

@bạn max: bài của bạn viết rất đúng format, chia ý rất rõ ràng. Có đủ mở bài, thân bài, kết luận :p tuy nhiêm có một số điểm yéu mà nếu khắc phục được thì viết sẽ tốt hơn rất nhiều. Ví dụ bạn thử viết sáng tạo hơn một chút nữa xem, hoặc cố gắng sử dụng từ mạnh hơn, viết thuyết phục hơn một tí... Hạn chế dùng moreover, in addition,... để nối các đoạn vì nhhw thế rất nhàm và artificial. Nếu suy nghĩ của bạn coherent thì ko cần những từ giống như băng dính như vậy essay của bạn vẫn sẽ... cohesive
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« Reply #129 on: June 20, 2010, 09:16:58 pm »

@thiduong: chắc vì e dốt văn từ nhỏ anh ạ =)) :-<

 thanks ô a nhiều ạ, có lẽ e phải sửa ngay cái kiểu viết phó mặc thế này! :-<

@svtb: indeed I'm really bad at using English, especially to social probs =))
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« Reply #130 on: July 18, 2010, 06:51:13 am »

Write about the following topic :
   Some people believe that it is good for a country to host a major sports competition.Others think it causes many problems for the country . Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. (250 words).

It was my homework ! and i did :
       Nowadays, major sports events have the potential to offer significant benefits to any countries, but at the same time are likely to entail immense resource utilisation at enormous risk. This essay will show the benefits and some problems if some countries want to host of major sports competition.
       There are several obvious benefits. By sports competitions have greatly increased the economical capacity of regional economies.  Sports events has many positive aspects to society. It fosters collaboration among the public sector, private sector, and community; it breaks down barriers between political parties, as well as various levels of government (national, regional and local); it improves government efficiency and sets an example for new ideas and behaviors such as environmental sustainability, diversity, and community involvement. Another positive aspect that is the newly created employment opportunities associated with sport are most often low-skilled and casual. Owing to sports events so there is an increased in monetary and tourism are the relative and first effects of sporting . For example : the World Cup soccer , the International Olympics, World events Golf ,.... . These events highlight the countries which to host  them .
         On the other hand , the most common criticism is that some citizens do not want to host a major sports competition. Because the major sports competition often brings a lot of spectators to watch after that many problems will occur. For example : spectator violence in stadiums , public intoxication, underage drinking, spectator party riots .They are also related to issues of crowd control at other types of locations as examples crowd control in open fields and along public thoroughfares , littering, loitering, traffic congestion even terrorism acts. Furthermore, the host countries have to spend a enormous money to build the sports competition areas as well as having to invest more on security.
         In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is good thing for a country to host a major sports competition. Because it will make for the country more famous and can earn a lot of money from visitor and tourist as well as to spread  knowledge about the culture, people and life of the country .
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« Reply #131 on: July 26, 2010, 12:34:27 am »

 Nowadays, major sports => sport events have the potential to offer significant benefits to any countries, but at the same time (?) are likely to entail immense resource utilisation at enormous risk. This essay will show the benefits and some problems if some countries want to host of major sports competition.
       There are several obvious benefits. By(?) sports competitions have greatly increased the economical capacity of regional economies.  Sports events has many positive aspects to society. It fosters collaboration among the public sector, private sector, and community; it breaks down barriers between political parties, as well as various levels of government (national, regional and local); it improves government efficiency and sets an example for new ideas and behaviors such as environmental sustainability, diversity, and community involvement. Another positive aspect that is => is that the newly created employment opportunities associated with sport are most often low-skilled and casual. Owing to sports events so there is an increased in monetary and tourism are the relative and first effects of sporting . For example : the World Cup soccer , the International Olympics, World events Golf ,.... . These events highlight the countries which to host  them .
         On the other hand , the most common criticism is that some citizens do not want to host a major sports competition. Because the major sports competition often brings a lot of spectators to watch after that many problems will occur(why dont link this sentence with the previous one?). For example : spectator violence in stadiums , public intoxication, underage drinking, spectator party riots .They are also related to issues of crowd control at other types of locations as examples crowd control in open fields and along public thoroughfares , littering, loitering, traffic congestion even terrorism acts. Furthermore, the host countries have to spend a enormous money to build => building the sports competition areas as well as having to invest => investing more on security.
         In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is good thing for a country to host a major sports competition. Because it will make for the country more famous and can earn a lot of money from visitor and tourist as well as to spread  knowledge about the culture, people and life of the country . (why dont link this sentence with the previous one?)


=>>>> Very good ideas, but can u check 'gain ur usage of linking words ( by, because)? I think ur essay will be more coherent :-bd

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« Reply #132 on: March 06, 2011, 06:00:10 pm »

Xin chào cả nhà, em là thành viên mới. Em rất thích topic này, mong mọi người giúp đỡ.
Trình độ của em không giỏi, nên k đủ khả năng viết theo chủ đề có trước (rất nghèo từ ạ)
Nên em sẽ viết theo cảm xúc (:p)

Nhờ các anh, chị, thầy, cô, bạn giúp đỡ em nhé. Em xin cảm ơn rất nhiều ạ!

Hello everybody, i'm new member. I love this topic and need to be help by other members.
My English isnt well, it's difficult for me to write english essay follow available topic (poor vocabulary ) So i'll write depend on the mood I'm in.

Pls help me. Thank you very much!

Trong lúc bối rối, có gì sai sót, mọi người cứ chỉ điểm giúp em nhé.


Topic 1: Music

Have you ever imagine our life without music? How boring the world is! In my opinion, music is the most wonderful “thing” in the world. It’s a big part of my life. I love music which has soft melody and is written by artist’s love for music and of course it’s sang by singer’s heart. I usually listening to music depend on the mood i’m in. I enjoy listening to kid’s songs when i’m sad. Their simple and funny lyrics make me smile, really feed better. International hits are the best choice when i finish a romantic love story novel or a korea’s film. The flowery words in lyric songs paint a dream life picture. I prefer classical music when it’s cloudy day. My feeling is peaceful and comfortable although i can’t understand anything. (maybe it’s the main reason >__<) Sometimes, in a shower day, i have some romantic actions such as: walking in the rain, going to my favourite coffee and listening to the sound of life. It’s showed me a beatiful life and “all my trouble seem so far the way” (yesterday – John Lennon) …

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« Reply #133 on: March 06, 2011, 09:39:13 pm »

Hi Iris!

Thank you for awaking this topic.
You have done a great job. I remember I read a quote that went something like because someone does not know what to write about, he starts with himself. You are on the right track.

I just have a few small suggestions:

Have you ever imagine imagined our life lives without music? How boring the world is! would be (Because you are imagining, right?).

In my opinion, music is the most wonderful “thing” in the world. (Don't use unnecessary " ".)

It’s a big part of my life. (Big is okay, but something like important, vital, or indispensable are better, and more specific.)

I love the kind of music which has soft melody melodies and, is written by the artist’s love for music, and, of course, it’s is sang by the singer’s heart. (I tried to arrange your words in parallel. Grammatically, it is known as parallelism mistakes. Yours was quite a long sentence. Try to trim it down to be clearer, ok?)

I usually listening to music depend on the mood i’m in. (Oops, a verb error!
Just write a simple sentence. Start with Subject + Verb + Object. Your words above seemed not make much sense.
How about? I listen to various kinds of music, and normally it depends on my moods.
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I enjoy listening to kid’s songs when i’m sad. Their simple and funny lyrics make me smile, really feed better. International hits are the best choice when i finish a romantic love story novel or a korea’s film. The flowery words in lyric songs paint a dream life picture. I prefer classical music when it’s cloudy day. My feeling is peaceful and comfortable although i can’t understand anything. (maybe it’s the main reason >__<) Sometimes, in a shower day, i have some romantic actions such as: walking in the rain, going to my favourite coffee and listening to the sound of life. It’s showed me a beatiful life and “all my trouble seem so far the way” (yesterday – John Lennon) …

Hey Iris, I could not keep editing. You were doing well, but please give it another try. Read again the above italicized passage, edit all the typos and verb errors, and do not forget to go straight to the point. Post it here. You will be helped in no time.



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« Reply #134 on: May 04, 2012, 09:36:49 pm »

I decided to give a hand and sent a post into social bookmarks. I hope the popularity will rise in.
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